IELTS Writing task 2 | Job satisfaction

There is no doubt that job satisfaction plays a significant role in a person’s health and wellbeing. If a person spends a large amount of time doing a job that they do not enjoy it can have a detrimental effect on their health both physically and mentally. However, I believe there are some common factors that lead to job satisfaction, but I do not think is achievable for everyone.

Firstly, a supportive employer can be a major factor for employees. If people feel appreciated at work with incentive schemes based on performance or career development opportunities, they will find their job more rewarding Colleagues also contribute to job satisfaction as a negative working environment can lead to anxiety and poor performance which could ultimately create more problems in the workplace. Although many people would consider money as the main factor for a satisfying job, I believe interest is the most significant. If a person really enjoys what they do, then they will be satisfied at work regardless of the salary.

Unfortunately, job satisfaction is not possible for all workers. In developing countries, the education level is often poor so that limits what kind of job people can get, often the only jobs available are  blue collar manufacturing jobs. In these countries, poverty is a serious issue and people need to take any job they can just to provide for their family. In addition, due to the recent global pandemic, many people have lost their jobs, so it is not unusual to find someone with a university degree delivering packages for Amazon. In these circumstances, job satisfaction is likely to be low as working is just a means of making money.

In conclusion, although there are some common factors that lead to job satisfaction these will vary from person to person. However, in many situations people have no choice but to take any job they can get to survive, job satisfaction is not even a consideration.

(325 words)

Essay analysis

The introduction is clear and the writer has clearly outlined what ideas are going to follow in the essay. 

 For some topics you may have a lot of ideas and it will not be possible to include them all. In this essay the writer has chosen to include some ‘common factors’ in the first paragraph that most people would probably agree would provide job satisfaction, however, there could be other factors more relevant for you. The second paragraph deals with the second part of the question in more global terms using developing countries and the recent global pandemic as examples to show that in these circumstances job satisfaction is unlikely. Both paragraphs have clear ideas and transitional phrases have been used effectively. The conclusion summarises the main ideas of the essay and gives a final comment on the topic.

All aspects of grammar and lexis are controlled with precision throughout the response and there is good use of collocations both general and specific. To become a better writer and achieve a higher band score it is important to use collocations. Have a look at our article on the importance of collocations here  https://www.paramountielts.com/collocations-blog/ and the academic collocation list here https://paramountielts.com/wp-content/uploads/2020/09/AcademicCollocationList.pdf